How far is too far?
How far is the line?
Which keeps us from overstepping boundaries,
And I keep stepping on the line,
With no remorse left to feel inside
The veil is lifted and now people can see me,
What I truly am
With cruel charade around me
The raven-haired girl wept and wept endlessly
As the pain became unbearable
Longing to dissolve in the night sky
She waited for infinite years
For her sweet release, finally, she decided
I needed an angel, to save me from myself
The heavy mist shrouding me
Filled with no hope, no light, no magic
Making the heartacheย within,
To leave this body, yearning to be freed from this captivity.
I want to be free and mingle with darkness
Residing within me, just like the raven
Flying in the night sky
well written. keep stepping on the lines especially those that are arbitrary and unreasonable and that’s what sets u apart from others and makes you special and unique. Veil should definitely be lifted but of ignorance and not of modesty. best wishes ๐
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Atul your lovely comment made my morning ๐๐
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My Pleasure. delighted to know that
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Very beautiful.
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Thank you dr ๐๐ปโค๏ธ
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This is so intense.. Well penned mate..
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M glad you liked it Chiru ๐ ๐
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The mysterious Raven girl poignant yet so desirous
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haina ๐๐
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For sure ๐
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I really love the raven haired
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Me too dr
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Free with the darkness….so so deep Didi! ๐๐๐๐
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kash aisa sach me hota
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Nice poem!
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I try, thanks a lot for reading ๐
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Do you entertain guest posts?’cause I am a poet as well
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never done before, but open to the idea
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Then how should I send it to you for consideration??
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First write a poem, then we will see ok?
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Cool
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Great work
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thanks yar ๐
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It’s totally cool. Just reply to my other comment as well
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Being free with the darkness can be an illuminating experience.
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Your comments are really inspiring, thanks oll friend. You just made my day better โค๏ธ๐๐
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You’re too kind, Pia.
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I try ๐
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Wow! such a great descriptiveness. I like it!!!
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Thanks a lot yar๐๐๐
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This is an intense piece, great work on this.
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You think so?
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